Even though the story seems realistic, the execution often feels disjointed and rushed. We haven’t really gotten to know Lilia yet—we haven’t seen any likable or appealing traits in her—when suddenly she becomes Elena’s girlfriend and immediately starts abusing her. I didn’t feel well connection to the characters or immersion in the story; the protagonist simply goes with the flow rather than participating in her own story. Still, for a first visual novel, this is a decent start. I hope the next one will be deeper and better! Good luck.
thank you for the feedback! i did struggle balancing the art and story flow with the time limit, and i sadly could not get all the details down that I wanted to, but it was a great learning experience. i’ll keep all of this in mind when making my next one!
cold intro that immediately left me curious for more.
the art reminds me of early 2010's dating sims, in the best of ways. it's a sort of charm that i really like to see. this is a very nice first visual novel, especially made by one person! ty for creating it <3
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Even though the story seems realistic, the execution often feels disjointed and rushed. We haven’t really gotten to know Lilia yet—we haven’t seen any likable or appealing traits in her—when suddenly she becomes Elena’s girlfriend and immediately starts abusing her. I didn’t feel well connection to the characters or immersion in the story; the protagonist simply goes with the flow rather than participating in her own story. Still, for a first visual novel, this is a decent start. I hope the next one will be deeper and better! Good luck.
thank you for the feedback! i did struggle balancing the art and story flow with the time limit, and i sadly could not get all the details down that I wanted to, but it was a great learning experience. i’ll keep all of this in mind when making my next one!
cold intro that immediately left me curious for more.
the art reminds me of early 2010's dating sims, in the best of ways. it's a sort of charm that i really like to see. this is a very nice first visual novel, especially made by one person! ty for creating it <3
thank you so much for the kind words!